The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is often argued that the significant purpose of
science
should
to
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change
people
’s
live
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. I absolutely agree with
this
view because
science
serve
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as
a sources
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a source
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of knowledge and its invention. Nowadays,
science
has
main
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role in
education
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field as a
sources
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of knowledge.
In other words
,
science
shall
be render
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contribute
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to
people
by educating them with valuable theories in varied
field
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which can lead them to develop
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the potentials
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potentials
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that they have.
As a
result
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result,
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people
will have an
increase
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quality of
life
.
For instance
,
a
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medical students have been learning about human disease.
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consequence
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consequence,
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the student will have a good skill to analyse human’s ailment.
On the other hand
, the invention of
science
can make an improvement in
people
’s
life
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.
This
will bring
people
to
have
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a new cycle of
life
.
Moreover
, it
also
make
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people
to
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do something easier.
For instance
: in the past
people
used to
be used
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traditional medicine to heal
a
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disease,
however
, now
people
tend to consume medicine from
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due to
the development of
science
in
medicine
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field. Meanwhile, sometimes the aim of
science
make
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a decrease
of
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people
’s
life
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. It
make
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people
explore and try anything that
regard
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with
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any development of
science
, and
at
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in
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the
end
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end,
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people
will be
addict
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of
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to
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the development.
To sum up
, a
common
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held
believe
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that
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is that
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aim
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the aim
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of
science
make
people
has
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an improvement
of
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life
due to
their knowledge and their inventions of
science
. I wholeheartedly support
this
perspective that
science
give
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a big impact and
change
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people
's
live
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lives
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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