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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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This
 line chart depicts the ratio of
the
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joblessness in two countries, the United States and
Japan
 from 3/1993 to 3/1999. It is clear from the graph that, there was a significant gap
of
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in
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 the unemployment
rate
 in
March
 1993
although
 in
March
 1999 the
rate
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was
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 at the same level.

According to
 what is shown,
the
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in the
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 USA, the percentage of work
force
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workforce
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 dropped sharply by 1.5% between
March
 1993 and
March
 1995 and remained stable
around
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at around
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 5.5 per cent for two years.
Then
, at the beginning of 1997-03, the ratio began to decrease
until
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to
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 4.3 percent in 1999-03.
The proportion of unemployed in
Japan
on
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 the other hand, was 2.3 per cent and gradually
cilmbed
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climbed
 to 3.5% in
March
 1996.
Then
, remained steady at the same ratio till rocketed significantly from
March
 1998 to
March
 1999 to 4.7
percent
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per cent
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.

To sum up
, we could say that the
American’s
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rate
 of
the
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unemployed was more than
Japan
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Japan's
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 by 5.3
percent
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per cent
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 in 03/1993
while
 in 03/1999,
Japan
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Japan's
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rate
 had become more than
US
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the US
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 by 1 per cent.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, rate, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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