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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? What sort punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour for children?

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Learning to distinguish between the good and the bad at an early age is really essential. There are many people who believe that penalizing the youngster is important. I totally disagree with
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 issue.
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, parents or teachers can use punishment in many special
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. Nowadays
children
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 are most vulnerable to
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 affected by surroundings and electric media as they easily get exposed to
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 media. It is impossible to protect them
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 exposed to the external environment.
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, when
children
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 make mistakes, adults should depend on the situation,
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 up with appropriate solutions.
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, the idea
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children
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 through penalty is totally wrong. Because we are not living in an era where to emphasise learning with penalties as
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 are changing,
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 concept is
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 getting changed over
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,
children
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 are still young toddlers it seems wrong to punish them as they can not understand the reason.
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,
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 in
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 learnt through punishment without bringing no damage to their
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 as compared to
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, parents,
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 have to put themselves in the
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 themselves, if they want to understand
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 teach their
children
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 well. They have to play a motivational role in
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's life that influence them to follow.
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, we should control
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's information and entertainment platforms on the internet so
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that
 they limit their exposure to bad things. To
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conclude
, I believe that
children
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 have to learn about correct and incorrect things at
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 age and punishment is one of the effective ways to guide them
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 the distinction.
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, parents and teachers must use constructive and positive punishments to show them the right case.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Morality
  • Responsible
  • Psychological impact
  • Reinforcement
  • Positive discipline
  • Cultural perceptions
  • Punitive measures
  • Empathetic understanding
  • Personality development
  • Caregivers
  • Legal boundaries
  • Ethical boundaries
  • Behavioural correction
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Corporal punishment
  • Time-out
  • Grounding
  • Behavioral modeling
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