It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? What sort punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour for children?

Learning to distinguish between the good and the bad at an early age is really essential. There are many people who believe that penalizing the youngster is important. I totally disagree with
this
issue.
However
, parents or teachers can use punishment in many special
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. Nowadays
children
are most vulnerable to
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affected by surroundings and electric media as they easily get exposed to
such
media. It is impossible to protect them
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exposed to the external environment.
Therefore
, when
children
make mistakes, adults should depend on the situation,
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up with appropriate solutions.
Firstly
, the idea
to teach
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children
through penalty is totally wrong. Because we are not living in an era where to emphasise learning with penalties as
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are changing,
this
concept is
also
getting changed over
ther
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the
course of time.
Secondly
,
children
are still young toddlers it seems wrong to punish them as they can not understand the reason.
Thirdly
,
children
in
past
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learnt through punishment without bringing no damage to their
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as compared to
current
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time.
On the other hand
, parents,
teachers
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have to put themselves in the
children
themselves, if they want to understand
as well as
teach their
children
well. They have to play a motivational role in
children
's life that influence them to follow.
Besides
, we should control
children
's information and entertainment platforms on the internet so
thay
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that
they limit their exposure to bad things. To
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conclude
, I believe that
children
have to learn about correct and incorrect things at
this
age and punishment is one of the effective ways to guide them
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the distinction.
However
, parents and teachers must use constructive and positive punishments to show them the right case.
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  • Psychological impact
  • Reinforcement
  • Positive discipline
  • Cultural perceptions
  • Punitive measures
  • Empathetic understanding
  • Personality development
  • Caregivers
  • Legal boundaries
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