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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps depict the layout of a municipal
park
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 called Grange
Park
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 during 1920 and that of the present day.
Overall
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, there are several principal changes to the center of the
park
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as well as
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 the removal and addition of a number of areas. Back in 1920, Grange
Park
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 could be accessed via Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. Located at the heart of the
park
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 was a fountain, and to the left-hand side of it was a platform for musicians' performances where lots of sitting areas could be found surrounding it.
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, there were two rose gardens opposite each other across the stage for musicians and another one next to Arnold's entrance.
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, adjacent to the right of Eldon's entrance, there was a glasshouse and a pond for water plants that could be found on the top right corner of the map. Today, the fountain has been demolished to build a rose garden with seats covering four sides of it. To the left-hand side of the map, except for the rose garden on the top, the rest of them have been destroyed and replaced by an amphitheatre for holding concerts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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