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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar chart shows the results of a survey into var use.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar chart shows the results of a survey into var use.
#percentage #journeys #forms #transport #four #countries #bar #results #survey #var
The picture
illusterate
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illustrate
illustrates
 the variety of methods used for
moveing
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moving
 from one place to another in 4 countries.
Overall
, In
United
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the United
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State
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States
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 of America and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
car
 is the first choice for transportation,
while
 bicycle or foot and
puplic
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public
 transport is the second one. Journeys made by
car
 account for
first
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the first
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 option, like 90% in
USA
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the USA
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 and 72% in
UK
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the UK
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,
while
 other means
for
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of
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 touring
shows
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show
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 a small
perecentage
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percentage
.In
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the Netherlands
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Netherlands
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,Netherlands
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 68% still
useing
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using
 an
automtive
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automobile
fallowed
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followed
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 by 18%
by
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on
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 foot,
in
contrast
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,contrast
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 Eighteen
percent
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per cent
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uses
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use
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puplic
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public
 transport and 11%
by
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on
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 foot in France. The
digram
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diagram
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demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the reason why people travel by
car
, 40% said because they don't have any other option,
while
 30% stated they need a
car
 to go to work and
ohers
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others
 said it's more convenient, faster and it will help them during nightshifts.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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