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Nowadays people get married and have children after the age of 30. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples based on your experiences.

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In these times, many people take in
marriage
 and have their
kids
 after they reach 30 years old. When taking it into account, I believe that
this
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 is either positive or negative.
This
 article will deliver my
thought
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of
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this
 issue,
however
, argue in favor of the former.
to
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 begin with, getting married and having their children after 30 are now going on trend
due to
 the generation change. GenX, who is believed to
be
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 born before 1990, mostly have their own family. GenZ, who was born after the 1990s,
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grown
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 up in the era of
4th
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 industrial revolution, have
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 mindset. They believe that they should concentrate on
develop
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 themselves
in
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at
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their
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 younger
age
 in order to be mature enough and have
ability
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the ability
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 to give their children the best environment to grow up
.
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in.
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Hence
, only when they are well-prepared in
term
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terms
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 of their mental health, and
finance
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finances
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 for a
marriage
,
etc
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etc.
...
that
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they would get married.
This
 development are great
changes
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 because the more careful the couple prepare for their
marriage
, the better their married life will be.
In
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 the other hand, getting married and having
kids
 after the
age
 of 30 can
results
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result
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 in some consequences. Many
kids
 whose parents are over 30 have some health issues. As an example, children whose parents are in the
age
 of 35 have weaker
immunse
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immune
 systems than the ones with under 30-year-old parents.
To sum up
, taking in
marriage
 and
give
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 birth at the
age
 of 30 becomes more and more normal. I strongly believe that trend would lead to a better married life
as well as
better
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a better
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 environment to raise their
kids
 up.
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