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Some people believe that air travel is the best form of transformation. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Tourism or tourists have
bacome
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become
 an essential part of the global economy. For travelling, from one country to another people use different kinds of means of
transportation
,
for example
 via aeroplane. Some people believe that
air
transportation
 is
best
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the best
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 kind, whilst, others think in the opposite way. I personally, agree with the statement.
To begin
 with,
air
transportation
 is the most liable, fastest, and comfortable means of transport. Travelling by
air
, not only saves time, but
also
 a person feel so relaxed, because of the service provided
in
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 the plane. To exemplify , if a person is going abroad, by
air
 it will take only 16-17 hours, but by land or water
transportation
, it will take weeks.
On the other hand
, people think that
air
travelling
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travel
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 is very expensive.
Also
, sometimes, flights get
delayedbecause
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delayed because
 of weather conditions.
Moreover
, the fuel used for planes is
also
 not very efficient for the environment, which causes a lot of pollution.
To sum up
, everything
haspros
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has pros
 and cons, but,
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I stilI
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stilI
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still
 believe that
air
 travel is the best kind, because of its advantages.
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