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people now a days work hard to buy more things. this had made our life more comfortable but it is a pity many tradition values have been lost on the way to such materialism.to what extenet do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#people #work #had #life #pity #tradition #values #materialism #extenet
The debate
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wheather
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whether
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the classroom
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 should
be replace
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 by modern media
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films
 and
games
, computers.
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 multimedia tool
educations
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are
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 interactive and
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engaging
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engaging
,
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it is
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crucial
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crucial
 to prioritize the engagement of books in education. Flims,
games
 and computers have a unique style of education and have their own advantages. Flims can not only provide you with
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information on the
subject
 it
also
 provides with a clear picture and a concept of the
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 computers can not only give you
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knowledge
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subject
 but
also
 with
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 creative mind
it
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allows you to search the
subject
/topic
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 and with the help of
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a large
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 database and
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ever evolving
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 search engine technology it can provide
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mass information on the topic and able to provide a vast
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knowledge
 to the student. Now coming to
games
, video
games
 are a place where you can learn how to speak
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english
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while
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engaging
engagging
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engaging
 in a fun time with friends or fellow classmates, various online video
games
 provide
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a muliplayer
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muliplayer
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multiplayer
 based experience which allows people all over the world to connect with each other and learn more
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 communication.
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Engaging
 with a
technology based
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 approach on a
subject
 often highlights motivation and
also
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 quite fun for the learners.
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