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More and more today people want to get things done instantly (services, information, goods and tasks) without having to wait. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, more
people
 need to get their work done as fast as they can
such
 as
services
, information, goods and
tasks
 with little wait time. I will explain why
this
 is happening and it is a negative trend because the
quality
 of their job might not be the best. First of all, a lot of individuals nowadays would like to get their jobs done faster
such
 as
services
, information, goods and
tasks
 because of their busy lifestyles which make them have a number of errands, so they are more likely to expect most
tasks
 done instantly.
For example
,
people
 feed their families at home with ready-cooked meals which require only a couple of minutes in the microwave or oven. The more
people
 have a busy lifestyle in the modern world, the more they choose all
tasks
done
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 instantly.
This
 is a negative development because
people
 opt for an unhealthy way to feed themselves and when they require quick and instant
services
, the result of the service or
tasks
 might not be the best
quality
.
For instance
, when they want to have their hair cut they expect to finish it in 10 minutes so the hairdressers might feel stressed and the
quality
 of the
services
 might not be the best. The more
tasks
 or
services
 are done quickly, the more likely the possibility that
services
 or works are less in
quality
. In conclusion, most
people
 want all
tasks
 finished instantly because they have less time to work on them.
In addition
, it is a negative development because the work they produce or receive will not be the best because less time is spent on it.
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