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The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020. The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020. The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graphs give information about how many people went to live in another country in several nations from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
,
Grmany
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Germany
, the
UK
 and the USA had the most immigrants and the
number
was
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increased by 2020,
while
 in India and
Russia
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,Russia
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 the
number
 of immigrants
was
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decresed
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decreased
.
According to
 what is shown, in the
UK
 the
people
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number of people
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 who went there was 5
million
while
 in 2020 doubled. The USA had the largest
number
 in both years, in 2000 was 35
million
 and
2020
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in 2020
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 was 50
million
.
Also
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 Germany had
went
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 up around 20% in 2000
was
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9
million
while
 in 2020 was 11
million
. India has the
lowset
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lowest
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immigrants
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number of immigrants
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between
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among
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 those countries, in 2000 the
number
 was 6
million
 and in 2020 was
droped
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dropped
 to 5
million
,
while
 in Russia was almost the
sam
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same
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 in both years.
The
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In the
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 national population in 2020,
Gernany
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Germany
 had the highest
percent
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per cent
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 (14.7) the second is the
UK
 (14%),
while
 in the USA lower
then
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than
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 the
UK
around
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at around
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 (5%) ad in Russia was (8.1%), the
last
and
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lowest country is India the ratio lower than 1 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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