The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020. The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the total number of international migrants in five countries between 2000 and 2020.

The table shows the percentage of migrants in each country's population in 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The graphs give information about how many people went to live in another country in several nations from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
,
Grmany
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Germany
, the
UK
and the USA had the most immigrants and the
number
was
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increased by 2020,
while
in India and
Russia
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the
number
of immigrants
was
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decresed
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decreased
.
According to
what is shown, in the
UK
the
people
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who went there was 5
million
while
in 2020 doubled. The USA had the largest
number
in both years, in 2000 was 35
million
and
2020
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was 50
million
.
Also
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Germany had
went
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up around 20% in 2000
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9
million
while
in 2020 was 11
million
. India has the
lowset
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lowest
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immigrants
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number of immigrants
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between
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those countries, in 2000 the
number
was 6
million
and in 2020 was
droped
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dropped
to 5
million
,
while
in Russia was almost the
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same
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in both years.
The
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national population in 2020,
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Germany
had the highest
percent
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per cent
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(14.7) the second is the
UK
(14%),
while
in the USA lower
then
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the
UK
around
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(5%) ad in Russia was (8.1%), the
last
and
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lowest country is India the ratio lower than 1 per cent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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