Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some believe that this information may be relevant and useful. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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job applyies is more difficult
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these days
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than past.
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,
this
is more difficult for job owners, too. Because of
this
, job owners want a
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from candidates, that
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some educational information with
also
hobbies and interests.
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, most part of
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folk think adding interests
such
as swimming or reading to their
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are
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not
neccesary
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necessary
.
This
essay will discuss both views
,
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and give logical reasons to support the first thought.
Firstly
, sometimes people do not want to share their personal interests with their employers because of privacy.
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might be understandable, but when
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about the idea that the employer is
also
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,
this
thought that
useful
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for protecting privacy is
getting
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useless. Because
,
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every employer
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to
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same
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language with their employees.
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of
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that
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, they want to find a co-worker
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that
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they can make their relationships good.
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, my friend who is a lawyer and company owner,
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that when he
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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