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Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of an international organizational rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

#responsibility #government
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In my personal opinion, environmental
protection
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 belongs to the responsibility of both international
organizations
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 and
government
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organizations
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. International
organizations
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 play an important role in supporting the transfer of technology, management programs, and human training to environmental
protection
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organizations
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 so that the
government
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 can do more in campaigns and policies. environmental
protection
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. Every year in Vietnam, foreign environmental
protection
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organizations
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 send people to train environmental
protection
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 staff in waste collection, transportation and treatment skills. International
organizations
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 often have greater resources than
government
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organizations
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such
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 as finance, people, and modern technology.
Therefore
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, they will have more information and forecast the environmental situation better and faster to help
government
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organizations
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 promptly adjust and handle the situation.
For example
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, the phenomenon of ice melting in the Arctic
due to
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 global warming is a warning for each country's environmental
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.
Government
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organizations
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also
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 have an important role in protecting the local environment more quickly and promptly. The scope of operations of
government
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organizations
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 is domestic, so it will be easier to monitor, check, and handle than international
organizations
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.
Government
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organizations
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 have on-site human resources, so processing, monitoring, inspecting, and propagating environmental
protection
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 activities to people will be faster and more effective. Environmental
protection
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 always
need
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government
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 and foreign
organizations
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 to combine to bring better results.
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