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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems

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Living in a country where a
person
 has to speak a
language
one
 is not used to can cause serious social issues and
also
 practical problems.
However
, I believe these issues might not be as common. For a
person
's
survival
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 I believe communication is a must and that requires speaking. A
person
 might have not heard of the
language
 he is required to speak. My opinion is that
internet
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 is a
to
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great
resourse
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resource
resources
to learn
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for learning
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 something
one
 should be able
navigate
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to navigate
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 through
cluster
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a cluster
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 of data. If a
person
 tries to learn a new
language
 he might be "trolled" by people on
internet
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the internet
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 into learning bad words which can cause serious social issues. Other
then
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 that a
person
 might do something in public which is considered unethical or unlawful. Being unable to understand what, possibly
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law enforcement or a property owner is asking of him, might land him into practical problems.
One
 other practical problem could be
aquiring
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acquiring
 education for a
sturlent
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student
 or landing a job for to the needy
persen
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person
. Being able to work
full time
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 would require
one
 to be able to convey ideas or
task
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tasks
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 in
the
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 foreign
language
.
Addtionally
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Additionally
,
jobs
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in jobs
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such
 as working at a restaurant or fast food sector, the highest rank job might be cleaning or sweeping as even being a waiter would require
one
 to talk.
However
, with the advancement of technology,
need
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the need
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of speaking
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to speak
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 a common tongue might not remain a requirement and with the help of
AI
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 the development has increased rapidly. Despite the development, I believe
this
to
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technology is going to be completed a bit
further
 into the future. So I agree that living
a
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country where
one
 is required
speak
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to speak
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a foreign languages
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a foreign language
foreign languages
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 will face social and practical problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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