The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of spending on food, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing in four different countries in 2009.
Overall
, people in four nations spent most of their
budget
on food, housing, and transportation,
while
the figures for health care and clothing were lower. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the highest percentage of the Japanese
budget
was for food at approximately 23%,
while
the proportion in the
UK
was 20% and those in Canada and the US stood at around 15%. Meanwhile, citizens in the US consumed over 25% of their
budget
on housing, followed by roughly 24% in the
UK
, 22% in Japan, and over 20% in Canada.
Similarly
, Canadians spent 20% of their total expenditure, which was 10%, 5%, and 3% higher than the figures in Japan, the
UK
, and the US. In terms of the other categories, these countries spent around 5% of their
budget
on clothing, which was slightly higher than that of their medical expenses.
While
health care accounted for nearly 7% in the US, there were only 4% in Canada and Japan
,
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and 1% in the
UK
.
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