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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside, Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there, What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, all over the world, the topic of building new
homes
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 in the
countryside
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 is omnipresent.
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 some people think the advantages of building
homes
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 in the
countryside
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 exist, others say there are disadvantages to creating new houses in remote
areas
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. From my point of view, both perspectives are valid for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as far as building new
homes
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 in the
countryside
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 is concerned,
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, to a large extent, especially in modern times, in both developed and developing countries, you can have more space for living
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 the fact that people do not live in apartments or buildings, leading to having their own houses.
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, having a house with a garden and space for living.
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, and most importantly, cities should not be overcrowded, on account of the fact that it is not concentrated in the same
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, resulting in less pollution.
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, there are disadvantages to building new
homes
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 in the
countryside
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. First and foremost, by and large, you cannot conserve nature, owing to the fact that you destroying animal
areas
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 resulting in the disappearance of some endangered animals.
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, at least to some degree, you might increase the pollution in remote
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 the reasons that waste is everywhere and it is more difficult to collect. In conclusion,
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 some people think that building new
homes
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 in the
countryside
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 has many advantages, others say there are disadvantages to populating the outback.
However
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, in my opinion, to some extent, both perspectives have value for the above-mentioned reasons.

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task response
The essay covers the advantages and disadvantages of building new homes in the countryside, but the arguments lack depth and development. It is important to thoroughly address the question and provide a clear opinion with supporting points.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat clear, but the development of ideas needs improvement. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific point, and use cohesive devices to link ideas together more effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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