The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001
The three pie charts
illustrates
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the changes in annual investment by a particular
uk
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UK
school
in 1981, 1991 and 2001. spending features are in insurance ,
techers'
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teachers'
salaries
,resources , furniture and equipment and other workers'
salaries
.
To begin
with ,in 1991, 50% percent
spending
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was spent
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for
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teachers'
salaries
by
school
. That
percentage
was increasing than
others
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other
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spending charges percentages in three years. In 2001,
insurance
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the insurance
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percentage
was increasing than than the other two
years
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insuarance
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insurance
percentages. The
percentage
was 8%. In 1981, other worker's
salaries
were increasing. But in 1991 and 2001 ,Other workers'
salaries
were decreasing than in 1981
percentage
.
In addition
,in 1981 ,resources for Spending 15%.But in 1991, 20%
percent
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invest
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invested
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for
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in
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resources and which
was increasing
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increased
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in 2001.
According
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,in 2001, furniture and equipment for spending 23%
by
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school
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the school
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.
Overall
, spending more money
for
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on
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teachers'
salaries
in 1981, 1991 and 2001 by
school
.
As well as
in 1991 ,50%
percent
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per cent
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spending
teachers'
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on teachers'
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salaries
, which was high than the
othe
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other
two years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, salaries, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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