The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001
The three pie charts
illustrates
the changes in annual investment by a particularChange the verb form
illustrate
uk
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UK
school
in 1981, 1991 and 2001. spending features are in insurance , techers'
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teachers'
salaries
,resources , furniture and equipment and other workers' salaries
.
To begin
with ,in 1991, 50% percent spending
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was spent
for
teachers' Change preposition
on
salaries
by school
. That percentage
was increasing than others
spending charges percentages in three years. In 2001,Correct quantifier usage
other
insurance
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the insurance
percentage
was increasing than than the other two years
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years'
insuarance
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insurance
percentage
was 8%. In 1981, other worker's salaries
were increasing. But in 1991 and 2001 ,Other workers' salaries
were decreasing than in 1981 percentage
.
In addition
,in 1981 ,resources for Spending 15%.But in 1991, 20% percent
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per cent
invest
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invested
for
resources and which Change preposition
in
was increasing
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increased
According
,in 2001, furniture and equipment for spending 23% Add the preposition
toAccording
by
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apply
school
.
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the school
Overall
, spending more money for
teachers' Change preposition
on
salaries
in 1981, 1991 and 2001 by school
.As well as
in 1991 ,50% percent
spending Change the spelling
per cent
teachers'
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on teachers'
salaries
, which was high than the othe
two years.Correct your spelling
other
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