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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001
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The three pie charts
illustrates
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 the changes in annual investment by a particular
uk
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UK
school
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 in 1981, 1991 and 2001. spending features are in insurance ,
techers'
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teachers'
salaries
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 ,resources , furniture and equipment and other workers'
salaries
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.
To begin
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 with ,in 1991, 50% percent
spending
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was spent
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for
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on
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 teachers'
salaries
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 by
school
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. That
percentage
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 was increasing than
others
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other
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 spending charges percentages in three years. In 2001,
insurance
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the insurance
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percentage
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 was increasing than than the other two
years
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years'
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insuarance
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insurance
 percentages. The
percentage
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 was 8%. In 1981, other worker's
salaries
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 were increasing. But in 1991 and 2001 ,Other workers'
salaries
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 were decreasing than in 1981
percentage
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.
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 ,in 1981 ,resources for Spending 15%.But in 1991, 20%
percent
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per cent
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invest
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invested
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for
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in
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 resources and which
was increasing
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increased
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 in 2001.
According
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toAccording
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 ,in 2001, furniture and equipment for spending 23%
by
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apply
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school
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the school
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.
Overall
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, spending more money
for
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on
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 teachers'
salaries
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 in 1981, 1991 and 2001 by
school
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 .
As well as
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 in 1991 ,50%
percent
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per cent
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 spending
teachers'
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on teachers'
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salaries
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, which was high than the
othe
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other
 two years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, salaries, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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