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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The display table and chart give data on the police budget for 2017
as well as
 2018 in one area of Britain. The below information describes
also
about
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how the money was spent on salaries, technology buildings and transport. the Police budget for 2017-2018 in pounds,
in
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 the
year
 2017, the national government was 175.5 meter, local taxes was 91.2 meter, other sources were 38 meter and the total was 304.7
metre
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meters
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. In the
year
 2018, the national government was 177.8
metre
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metres
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, local taxes 102.3
metre
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metres
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, other sources
was
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 38.5
metre
 and the total was 318.6
metre
. How much was spent
in
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 salaries in 2017 was 75% but in 2018 it was 69%. Technology in 2017 was 8%
however
 in 2018 it was 14%. In buildings and transport in the
year
 2017 and in the
year
 2018 it was 17%.
To conclude
, the above information
describe
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about
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the
year
 2017 and 2018 in
police
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the police
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 budget.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, metre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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