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Violence in films has led to a number of problems in society. What are these problems and how can they be solved?

#violence #films #society
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 lot of people
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going on trips
are
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increses
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increasing
 stragically ,which makes the climate conditions
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,
changing
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and
its
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 affects
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melting
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 the high frequency of networking and it converts the ice into water and
those
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 melted ice
turn
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 into flud and
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affects
affect
 the people near the the river sides. In
additional
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, most
of
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 are
cuting
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cutting
 down
the
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apply
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tree
for
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to
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bulding
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building
 houses,
making
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make
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 furniture, and
lot
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a lot
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 more. These activities
leeds
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lead
 to deforestation , lack of water , dry
nesss
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dryness
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also
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 increases the
frezzing
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freezing
 climate
in
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the
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night times. To
recaptulate
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recapitulate
, most of the things
human
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humans
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 do for
there
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their
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 temporary living is
affets
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affects
the
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nature and the environment.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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