Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that
people
mostly achieve their goals
by
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through
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a question of luck.
Due to
fact that in the present
time
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there are a
lot
of youngsters who
are reach
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their goals in the young ages. Now
people
are beginning to realize a
lot
of achievements of other
people
. Personally, I
am disagree
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with
this
statement.
Hence
, I will write about my decision for
this
statement.
Firstly
, it is well known that nowadays
people
become more productive despite their young ages. What I mean here is that teenagers and other young age
people
are
reach
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their own aims a
lot
more in comparison
of
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to
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the past century. One of the main reasons behind
that is
hard-working
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, because
of
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what it is looks like unrealistic. A good case in point is teenagers of the present time, who are more confident
for
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their actions.
On the other hand
, it can
also
be argued that
people
can not see the tough way, which they pass through tears and pain.
That is
to say
mostly
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most
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someone
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people's
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achievement
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achievements
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is seems
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seem
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like
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impossible for
the
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others, so it seems like they reach their aims only by a question of luck. Take
for example
successful and young millionaires who's achievements
looks
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like impossible for others. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that a
lot
of
people
achieve their aims because
their
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of their
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hardworking and productive skills, which is the only way to reach our goals.
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  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
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