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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

#people #shop #food #supermarkets
Ecommerce
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E-commerce
 plays a major role in
morden
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the modern
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 period
people
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People
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use
 to buy
food
 online. It is
increase
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increasing
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 day by day . But
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of
food
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the food
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 they
use
 to buy is not fresh or either
rippen
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ripped
 off . Online shopping of
vegitable
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vegetable
vegetables
 is
increreas
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increasing
now
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nowadays
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 a days as working one
use
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uses
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 to buy
food
 through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
they
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They
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 dont have
time
 to go to the
super market
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supermarket
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 to purchase them .
Although
 it is very
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and helpful . Most of the
web sites
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websites
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 and
company
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companies
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insure
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ensure
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 delivery
withing
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within
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 the day itself or in 24 Hours . The companies are providing Job
Opportunites
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opportunities
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 for the jobless. It must
be increase
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be increased
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 in
devoloping
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developing
 countries . Online shopping does not
needs
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need
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 to
be grow
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grow
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 in
a
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apply
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high demand because the items they sell are not fresh . They
are
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do
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 not
caring
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care
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of
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about
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 the
food
 and are
enabled
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unable
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 to deliver us the best item . They
use
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used
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 to keep the item in
storage
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a storage
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 house for a long period of
time
 .
Which
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This
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 makes the
vegitables
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vegetables
 and fruits unhealthy
due to
 the rise of
the
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apply
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"Bacteria"
on
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in
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 them . Can cause
one
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apply
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a
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apply
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major health
issue
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issues
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to
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apply
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one
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apply
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. They don't allow economic growth of the farmer or the owner of the market . Companies buy
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the product
a product
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product
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products
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 directly from the
contracter
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contractor
 or the shipper of the
food
 which
donot
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do not
 allow any third party to
interfare
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interfere
. He
use
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used
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 to buy
product
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products
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 at a very low rate and resell them
on
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at
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 a high rate which does not allow them to grow economically . In
conclusion
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 we must say that ecommerce should be practised by those who are not
abe
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able
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 to take
time
 out of their busy schedule . In order to take care of
ones
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one's
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 health we must go to the supper market and purchase them directly from there itself .
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