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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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E-commerce plays a major role in the modern period People use to buy
food
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 online. It is increasing day by day . But the majority of the
food
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 they use to buy is not fresh or ripped off . Online shopping for vegetables is increasing nowadays days as working one uses to buy
food
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 through the Internet. They don't have time to go to the supermarket to purchase them .
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 it is very time-consuming and helpful . Most of the websites and companies ensure delivery within the day itself or in 24 Hours . The companies are providing Job opportunities for the jobless. It must be increased in developing countries . Online shopping does not need to grow in high demand because the items they sell are not fresh . They do not care about the
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 and are unable to deliver us the best item . They used to keep the item in a storage house for a long period of time .
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 makes the vegetables and fruits unhealthy
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 the rise of "Bacteria" in them . Can cause major health issues . They don't allow economic growth of the farmer or the owner of the market . Companies buy products directly from the contractor or the shipper of the
food
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 which does not allow any third party to interfere. He used to buy products at a very low rate and resell them at a high rate which does not allow them to grow economically . In ,
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conclusion we must say that e-commerce should be practised by those who are not able to take time out of their busy schedule . In order to take care of one's health we must go to the supper market and purchase them directly from there itself .
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