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THE CHART SHOWS THE NUMBER OF WORKING HOURS PER WEEK, IN INDUSTRIAL SECTOR, IN 4 EUROPEAN COUNTRIES IN 2002

THE CHART SHOWS THE NUMBER OF WORKING HOURS PER WEEK, IN INDUSTRIAL SECTOR, IN 4 EUROPEAN COUNTRIES IN 2002
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The bar charts depict information about how much percentage of workers had
the
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a
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 specific range of working
hours
 in a week in four European countries in the year 2002.
Overall
, the maximum group in Denmark, Sweden and the UK worked for 36 to 40
hours
whereas
 in France it was between 31 and 35
hours
.
To begin
 with, In Denmark and Sweden, the most prominent working
hours
was
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were
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 36 to 40
hours
 constituting around 70 to 80 per cent of people. In the former, approximately 25%
people
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of people
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 worked for 31-35
hours
 and in the latter, it was about 39%. Employees working in other working
hours
 in both countries stayed the same with an approximate figure of less than 20%. It is evident that the majority of the employees worked around 36 to 40
hours
 in the UK
while
 in France it was around 31 to 35
hours
.
Additionally
,working
hours
range
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ranging from
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 36 to 40 was the second most
hours
 where 40 per cent perform their tasks. The Percentage of employees in the remaining working
hours
 in the UK was less than 20 per cent.
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