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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The given line charts demonstrate information regarding households owning electrical facilities and
time
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 spent on chores in one specific country in the
time
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 span of 1920 to 2019. As an overview,
besides
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 the first 20 years of
this
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 decade, the highest rate of ownership among these given electrical appliances belongs to the refrigerator.
In addition
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, the vacuum cleaner found its popularity in 2019 and the ownership percentage of it becomes equivalent to the Refrigerator.
Also
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,the
hours
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 spent on house chores have their highest number at the beginning of the period
this
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 figure shows a striking downward trend to the end of the given
time
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 period. As it can be observed, at the beginning of the
time
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 span having a washing machine was much more popular among
householders
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 than the other two mentioned facilities with 40% of their
population
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.
However
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, there is a negligible difference in percentage which is 10% between
this
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 supply and vacuum cleaner.
In contrast
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, there is a noticeable difference between the amount of ownership of refrigerators and Washing machines which Washing machines took over with approximately 40% more
population
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. At
this
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time
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 households spend the highest amount of
time
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 on housework with 50
hours
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 per week. Onward 1920, washing machines fluctuated during the given
time
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 span and lost their popularity among
householders
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 with nearly 71% of the
population
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.
Conversely
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, both the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner figures had been experiencing striking increases in
population
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 between 1940 and 2019 until they both reached 100% of
householders
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. Meanwhile,
this
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 mentioned
time
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 period of
hours
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 spent by
householders
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 on house chores experienced a significant decline until it reached roughly 10
hours
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 per week in 2019.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, householders, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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