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Some people think that government should tax unhealthy foods to encourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, people encourage themselves to lead a healthy life because of many rising diseases. Even though many of them aren't concerned about eating healthily. I agree with the taxation on unhealthy
foods
 and that should be implied to reduce its usage. To start with the consequences of unhealthy
foods
such
 as sugary drinks, junkies, etc. These kinds of
foods
 make a huge impact on lifestyle and health. In
this
 modern ,age people likes to eat more junkies rather than concentrate on their health. Because these
foods
 are convenient and time-saving. But consumption of these
foods
 often paves the way to obesity, heart disease, diabetes, etc. Implementing the tax for these
foods
 is likely to create more awareness of and importance of healthy diets.
For example
, countries like the USA and Mexico increased their taxes on sugary beverages and preserved
foods
 are likely to reduce their consumption. An increase in tax makes people think in the right way and maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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