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Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Universities that require
students
 to learn about many
subjects
 are better than beam focusing
students
 on a single
subject
, making it more difficult to understand some scientific
subjects
 that involve mastering other basic
subjects
 first and it creates minimum interest growth in
other
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subject
 that they might accel at. Graduate
students
 should be interested in the actual market demand to be hired.
For instance
, taking petroleum engineering specialisation without teaching the basics of math, physics and chemistry would make it magnitudes harder to comprehend the concept of petroleum engineering. Be it from reservoir characteristics
,
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 to drilling or even to producing fluids, all will involve the basics from other
subjects
 to form a coherent understanding of the major (Petroleum Engineering).
Additionally
,
students
 who learn about various topics will be able to switch their major in the instance they feel comfortable with another
subject
 more appealing to them.
This
 not only ensures self-satisfaction
,
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 but
also
 motivates the disciples to learn and innovate in the
subject
 of interest. All in all, diving into various topics in an education institute will make it easier to comprehend majors that involve multiple scientific disciplines to understand,
furthermore
, studying
non-specalized
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non-specialized
non-specialised
topic
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 might pique the interest of
students
, making them pursue newer better
future
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futures
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 which will help them innovate and passionate about future work. A society invests in the future by investing in the new generation in universities,
this
 will always pay off by selecting the best formula to teach them. A youthful generation full of energy, innovation and
happinies
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happiness
 is the best outcome for
such
 an investment.
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