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1) The diagrams above give information on transport and vehicle consume in Edmonton.

1) The diagrams above give information on transport and vehicle consume in Edmonton.
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1) The diagrams above give information on transport and vehicle
consume
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 in Edmonton. 2) Now
people
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use
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transports
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transport
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 a lot.
And there
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 are a lot of reasons
of
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for
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any
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mankind to consume
the
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 and public
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transports
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transport
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.By looking at the chart,we can see the percentages of causes of population.Mostly,individuals
use
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transports
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transport
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 and
cars
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 to commute to work and business.And
then
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 some
people
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 take the children to
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school
 and shop
through
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with
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 the help of
cars
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.
Also
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,the chart demonstrates that over
one half
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 of
people
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 consume
the
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transports
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transport
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 to commute to work and just under
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 of individuals
use
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the
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public
cars
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 and their private
cars
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 to go to
busines
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business
. 3) But a tiny minority of them ride
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cars
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 to go
to
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shopping and
leisure
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 activities.Of course,everyone
agree
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with
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apply
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that more
people
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use
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the
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cars
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 to take children from school and to school.As for types of
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transports
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transport
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 and vehicles,the graph shows that almost half of
population
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the population
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use
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 their own
cars
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.As regards the
third,a
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 modest 10
percent
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per cent
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 of them
use
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 the taxi and public buses. 4) It is so clear that
the
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more individuals consume
the
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cars
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 to commute to
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their job
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job
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jobs
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.The stuff to mention is that one in three of them
need
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needs
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 the LRT.
That is
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,Light Rail Transit needs to
people
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 to go
to
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everywhere where they want.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, transports, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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