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Overall, it is clear from the pie chart that most of the time, citizens prefer to ride by own car rather than taxi, bus and LRT, with just under half per cents.

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Overall
, it is clear from the pie chart that most of the time, citizens prefer to ride by own car rather than
taxi
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a taxi
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, bus and LRT, with just under half per
cents
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cent
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.
Least
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The least
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 popular transportation methods are by buses and
taxi
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taxis
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, 2 out of 10 villagers are travelling by these
transports
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transport
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. The table provides a breakdown
by
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of
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 selected destinations and percentages of reasons for using the auto in urban life, with the pie chart indicating by what city goods they are transporting. Obviously, from the table,
most
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the most
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 vital application is to commute to
job
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a job
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,
that
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which
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counted
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counts
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 55 per
cents
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cent
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.
By contrast
, the business demands
employment
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the employment
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 of
automobile
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automobiles
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. As can be seen from the graph, taking children is
also
 one of the paramount benefits of car application, around 40 per
cents
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cent
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, compared to job reasons,
furthermore
 business, it doesn’t seem big difference between them.
However
, the pattern is the complete reverse when it comes to free time activities
,
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apply
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 and shopping. These selections are equal numbers with half of
third
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the third
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percents
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percent
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, certainly with low requirements to spend time with
autocar
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auto car
Autocar
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