Write about the following topic: Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

There are differing views on the aim
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university
tuition. Whilst one group believes the objective
for
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this
level of education is to make graduates suitable for the job market,
others
argue the purpose is for the broader benefit of individuals and
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society as a whole.
This
essay seeks to look at both sides of the matter. My opinion is that tertiary training serves all the purposes stated.
To begin
with, I can understand the thought that states that attaining a tertiary school certificate enhances one's chances of acquiring a better job.
This
is somewhat true. Some people pursue
university
studies to equip them for better professions. To clearly illustrate
this
, a number of
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jobs
such
as being a medical doctor, lawyer or engineer are reserved for persons who have completed
university
training and have certificates for these. It is obvious from
this
that some careers are only reserved for personnel who have completed
university
education.
Therefore
, for
persons
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to become medical doctors
for
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example, it is only logical for them to train
in
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a
university
to enable them
realise
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their dreams.
On the other
hand
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however
,
university
education grooms people to make them fit better in society and live a normal adult life. Taking myself
for example
, I learnt to be independent during my
university
days as I learnt to cook and keep my space clean. These stem from living away from family and having to take up certain responsibilities to live well which I would
otherwise
not have if not for that opportunity.
Also
, Sir Williams' survey of working adults showed that individuals had improved interpersonal relationships from having to share hostels with
others
at the
university
. They are said to have developed ways to cope with
others
from different backgrounds. These experiences
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made it easier for them to fit anywhere when it comes to relating with
others
at church, work,
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relationships
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to mention a few. The
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reasons
garners
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the added benefits of
university
schooling.
To sum up
, it is evident that, there are individual and societal gains from tertiary training that
goes
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beyond better job acquisition and I strongly agree with these.
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