You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the position of social

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events'

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events

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organiser of our leadership

trianing

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training

programme in

coming

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the coming

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month in

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the UK

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Although

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I have been working as a Business Analyst

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ABC for three years, I have

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had a

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apply

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great enthusiasm

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for

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events

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event

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planning since my childhood.

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, I am eager to apply

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this

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for this

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upcoming opportunity. I have

alreday

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already

seen the advertisement, which is published on the Hilton official website,

however

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, I could

find

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basic information there.

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, I would like to know

further

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details

such

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as qualifications, experience, and salary package. Please kindly let me know

these information

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, which I highly appreciate. As you know, I have been working as a part-time social

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events'

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events

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organiser

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Morley

club

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for five years, where I have

ogranised

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organised

organized

several successful

events

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including

annual

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the annual

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get together

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, cricket match, and dancing night. These

events

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have achieved great

sucess

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success

and I could gain

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apply

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invaluable experience through them.

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, I believe that I will be a great fit for

this

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upcoming role. Thank you for your prompt attention

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this

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matter, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.

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Your

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faithfully, Anne Peter

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Add a clearer introduction by stating your name at the beginning.

coherence and cohesion

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task achievement

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positive

Your enthusiasm for the role is very clear.

positive

The examples of your experience are relevant and specific.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

192 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

interested
event
organiser
role
request
information
experience
organisation
responsibility
participants
training
programme
welcome
details
skills
communication
helpful
plan
team
creative
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