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In education and employment, some people work harder than others, Why do some people work harder? Is it a good thing to work hard?

#education #employment #people #work
Some
People
work
 hard as
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usual, because those
people
 think when they
work
 hard, They will get high
paid
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 in the future, but some
people
 make merry
while
 they can, So those
people
 think
work
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 hard is a type
thing
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 to waste your time and your life. So let's follow with
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 two groups The advantage of working hard.
Firstly
, it can make bunches of money if they
working
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 hard, because most
of
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the
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Jobs,
is looking
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 your
efficient
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 and accomplishment, if those are
well
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, you will get higher paid than others.
Secondly
, I think working hard, because they want to have a strong personal
satisfication
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satisfaction
, many
people
 derive a sense of
fulfillment
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 and pride from their hard
work
.
Lastly
, Working hard
it
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can improve your working skills
,
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 because putting in effort can lead to the development of valuable skills and expertise.
However
, Working hard
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can make
people
 to have burnout, because excessive
work
 without proper balance can lead to physical and mental burnout, negatively affecting health and well-being.
In addition
, Working hard
it
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will make
people
 feel
stressing
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, because high
paid
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 is
build
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high pressure. In conclusion, working hard can be a positive and rewarding trait, but it's important to strike a balance between hard
work
 and other aspects of life to ensure
overall
 well-being. The right amount of effort depends on individual circumstances and goals.
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  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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