Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages

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It is common knowledge that additives added to food during
the
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production and preservation
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some benefits and drawbacks. I am of the opinion the advantages
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the disadvantages.
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with, there are several gains to the use of chemicals in food processing.
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, prolonged shelf life.
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makes the product stay longer than a fresh product will ordinarily. It is seen as
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only to the manufacturer but I think it's
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beneficial to the customers. Processed foods
saves
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the time of the consumer.
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is because they make cooking easier by eliminating the hours one has to spend
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handling fresh ingredients for meal preparation. Some of the meals can be readily consumed when opened as they have already been prepared in edible forms.
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, the durable nature of
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products saves some cost to the patronisers because it promotes bulk buying. Bulk buying is proven by studies as a means to save some money. It is an experience I have had. Obviously, these advantages
suits
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the busy lifestyle of the current working population in the world. Meanwhile, there is a perception
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people
developing
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cancer from eating meals with preservatives.
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fact is anecdotal as there
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scientific barking. Sir William Appiah has issued a paper to refute
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unreliable statements as
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him, if it were true the majority of us would have come down with some form of cancer as it is estimated the majority of the world's population consumes processed foods. It is clear we cannot rely on
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unproven allegations.
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, it is evident there are more advantages to using chemicals in food processing than disadvantages.
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