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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map illustrates the improvement of the village near London from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
,there have been several changes in the main road, railway station and
motorway
due to
 increases in population.
According to
 the map, there was no significant change in 1868-1883.
In addition
, the railway station built in the year 1909, which was crossed alongside the village in the south-west. It can be seen some expansion happened in the land in 1922 - 1970. The golf course and the park were implemented in the same period of time and the
Motorway
 was constructed and expanded to the south-east. The
Motorway
 and Railway track
was
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 enlarged during 1970
due to
increasing
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an increasing
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the
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number of people. Turning to the north-east corner of the village surrounded by a Proportion of people. The
motorway
 across the main road is located on the same side. The development is very beautiful when looking at the top angle.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words motorway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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