The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the data about the locations visited by citizens of Australia.There are Australian population,new migrants born in English-speaking countries and new migrants from other countries.Included locations in the bar chart are the zoo,library,theatre, and cinema.

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,cinema shows the highest trend with seventy per cent of the people who are born in Australia.Since it is the best entertainment place for young ones,the second greatest result is

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shown in cinema.

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, the library has the most foreign migrant visitors.Meanwhile,theatre has the lowest proportion of people having a peak at 10%.

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,another location the zoo has the largest peak at 50% of incomers of English-speaking countries.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

105 words

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