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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who used public transportation for the different
age
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 groups in two types of
cities
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, large
cities
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 and other
cities
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.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who used public
transport
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 was higher for large city residents for all
age
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 groups, except
people
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 in large
cities
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 who were 61 to 75
years
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 old used less public
transport
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 compared to other residents.
To begin
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, The proportion of individuals who lived in large
cities
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 and commuted with public facilities for the
age
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group
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 of 0-15, was 40%.
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 its relative number increased dramatically
while
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 urban
people
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 were getting older until it reached its maximum
percentage
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 of
usage
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, which were
people
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 who are 31 to 45
years
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 old as its relative number was more than 20%.
Then
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, the
percentage
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 of public
transport
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usage
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 among
people
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of
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 large
cities
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 dropped drastically to only 10% of the crowd when the population are 61 to 75
years
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 old. For the next generation
group
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, more than 76
years
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 old, there was an insignificant increase in public
transport
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usage
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. As can be seen, the
percentage
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 of other
cities
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 fluctuated insignificantly as their proportion differed from 15 to 25% with their
age
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group
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,
however
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, its
percentage
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 of
usage
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 ended at less than 10% for the
group
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 more than 76
years
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 old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, cities, percentage, transport, years, group, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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