The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.

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The display maps describe the change made in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015. The below information

give

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an idea about the change made in 2015. In the local industrial village, In the

year

1985, north side there was

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small

factory

. There was a small roadside

inns

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. Some trees, fields and

arlington

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road. In the

year

2015, there

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much

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significant

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increase in roadside

house

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houses

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. Small

factory

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factories

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have become

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big

factory

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. There are so many trees grown near

factory

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the factory

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. There has been

build

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so many houses for

works

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However

field

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remain

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as it is. But in the

year

2015,

industrial

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the industrial

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area

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coverd

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covered

by trees and

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apply

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many

house

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are

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made for the

employes

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. Village have made a great growth in 30 years from the

year

1985 to 2015.

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describe

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that there is

great

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different

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between 1985

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2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, factory with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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2Word repetition
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3 paragraphs

153 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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