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The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.

The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.
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The display maps describe the change made in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015. The below information
give
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 an idea about the change made in 2015. In the local industrial village, In the
year
 1985, north side there was
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a
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small
factory
. There was a small roadside
inns
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. Some trees, fields and
arlington
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 road. In the
year
 2015, there
is
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was
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 so
much
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significant
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 increase in roadside
house
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houses
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. Small
factory
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factories
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 have become
a
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apply
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big
factory
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factories
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. There are so many trees grown near
factory
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the factory
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. There has been
build
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building
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 so many houses for
works
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work
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.
However
,
field
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the field
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remain
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 as it is. But in the
year
 2015,
industrial
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the industrial
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 area
is
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was
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coverd
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covered
 by trees and
so
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apply
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many
house
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houses
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are
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were
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 made for the
employes
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employees
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. Village have made a great growth in 30 years from the
year
 1985 to 2015.
To conclude
, the above information
describe
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describes
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 that there is
great
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a great
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different
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 between 1985
as well as
 2015.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, factory with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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