The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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The given line chart demonstrates the

population

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that lived in cities rates in the

Philippines

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Malaysia

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Thailand

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, and

Indonesia

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between 1970 to 2020 and

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anticipates their future rates by 2040. As an overview,

Malaysia

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and

Indonesia

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figures show a striking increase in their

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this

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70-year period.

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Thailand

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population

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not only experienced a massive rise between 1970 and 2020, but

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it is going to face more growth in

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in 2040.

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, Philippine figures show fluctuations over

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time period. As it can be observable, at the beginning of the time period

Philippines

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was the leader in the city

population

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rate with approximately 31% and

Malaysia

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Thailand

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and

Indonesia

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took part onward with 30%, nearly 18% and close to 15% respectively.

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, by 2001 not only

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had overtaken the

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, but

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Indonesia

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overtook

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with roughly 30% of the city

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Malaysia

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has become the leader in city

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with a massive difference in percentage number having 25%, 35% and 45% more

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than

Indonesia

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, the

Philippines

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, and

Thailand

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respectively.

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due to

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a huge rise that cities will experience in 2040

Malaysia

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Indonesia

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Philippines

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, and

Thailand

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will have 80%,60%,54% and approximately 50% of their populations in the cities respectively.

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The use of social media such as Facebook or Twitter is replacing face-to-face contact this century. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Are classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?