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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives
the
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information about the estimated percentage of world
illiteracy
 by region and by gender in
last
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the last
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 year.
Overall
, it can be easily seen that there is a wide disparity in the
illiteracy
 rates between two
gender
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genders
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 in all
region
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regions
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. South
Asia
 experienced the highest
illiteracy
 rates
while
 the majority of residents in Developed Countries
was
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were
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 literate. Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
 had approximately one-third of
male
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males
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 being illiterate, and the figure for Developed Countries, Latin American/Caribbean, and East
Asia
/Oceania was at nearly 1, 10 and 8, respectively. Most women in
Arab
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the Arab
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 States and South
Asia
 can not read or write, at approximately 52 and 55, respectively.
However
, the proportion of
illiteracy
 women in the
remain
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 region was never as high as 50
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
 the chart, there
was
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 almost triple as many illiterate women as men in Sub-Saharan Africa,
Aran
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the African
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 States, and South
Asia
. Meanwhile, Developed Countries,
Latin
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and Latin
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American
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America
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/Caribbean
shared
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 the same
as
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the
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illiteracy
 rates in gender.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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