More and more people are using the internet to do their tasks rather than doing in person.Does the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage.

Nowadays, many
people
are depending
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on the
internet
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to get their jobs done
instead
of doing
themselves
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.
Although
this
can be useful in some cases,it comes with more adverse effects than the benefits. On one hand, technologies like
internet
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can help
people
to finish daunting tasks at a faster pace
thus
saving their valuable time and energy.
For instance
,
the
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advertising companies use
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internet
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for their marketing purposes and
this
makes it easy for them to reach more customers than meeting each
people
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person
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in person. On the other hand,
dependance
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dependence
depending
on the
internet
for daily tasks can make
people
lazy.
This
trend can have a negative effect on a person's creativity and imagination.
This
can
also
affect an individual's
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skills as they will get in a habit of relying on the
internet
for the solution
instead
of using their brain.
For example
, young kids search in
internet
about
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ideas for their
presentation
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presentations
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or
project
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rather than coming up with innovative or unique thoughts of their own.
To conclude
,
eventhough
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even though
technology can help us to perform tasks
at
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much ease,it can have a detrimental effect on
the
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society in
a
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long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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