should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education or it is the responsibility of the government of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves.

There is a huge argument regarding that it is a responsibility of the developed
countries
to raise their helping hands to non-wealthy
countries
in aspects of food and education,
while
another view is popped up as own government of the
country
should get the responsibility to take a prosperous surrounding to their citizens.I strongly believe that government should take steps to develop their own nation.
Firstly
, from past history,there are a plethora of examples where wealthy
nations
provide their help to other
countries
not only in disaster or other difficult situations
,
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but
also
in their developing process.
For instance
, up to
now
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Sri Lanka has taken financial, technological and manpower support from Japan and several other
countries
to develop health
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and transport facilities around the
country
. ,
Still
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there are lots of hospitals that basically run with the help of other
nations
.
Secondly
, to be ,honest even though leading governments in the world helping other
countries
to build up their nation, most of the developing
countries
stuck at the same wealth level for more than 50 years without any success or any measures to overcome their matters. Most of the leaders and population have a dependent mentality and always seeking donations rather than trying to build up the
country
.
To conclude
, in my ,view I believe that any person or
country
getting help from others to develop basic needs
also
, they won't sense the need to take proper steps to overcome the matter any more.
Therefore
, own
nations
should take the appropriate steps to develop their
country
,
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than depending on other wealthy
nations
.
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