The chart below shows information about the use of public transportation in one country, by age group and location of the residents in 2016.

The chart below shows information about the use of public transportation in one country, by age group and location of the residents in 2016.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows information about the use of public transportation in one country, by age group and location of the residents in 2016.
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demostrates
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demonstrates
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usage
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of public
transport
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in one country
seperated
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separated
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and residence location, in the year 2016.
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, the consumption
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of
public
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in other residents,
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public
transport
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in other residents
weren't
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used that much. In the given graph we can observe that the
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of public
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changed
drammatically
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dramatically
based on the age group.
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The
percentage
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kids and teenagers till 15
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about 40% for young adults and adults it was much
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higher, around 55%. For the next age group, the
percentage
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usage
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of public
transports
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transport
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reached
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its
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highest point
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apptoximately
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approximately
65%. From 46 till 75 the
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sudenly
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suddenly
decreased, from 65% to 10% respectfully, and
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again increased to 15% for 76+
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old.
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, the consumption of public
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changed gradually, kids under 15
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public
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that much,
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it smoothly reached the top of 25% for people around 16 to 30
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old. After
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the
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slowly decreased from 25% to 15% again for 31 to 45
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old and
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some for people from 46 to 60. From 65 to 75
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old the
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were
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around 20%, and the lowest number of
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used
were
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in
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the age
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cathegory
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category
76+
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old.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, transport, percentage, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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