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Tourism is an ever-growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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Under globalization, people travel around the world more frequently and the
tourism
 industry is flourishing,
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 about a myriad of advantages to both
individuals
 and society. Among the benefits that
tourism
 brings to
individuals
, probably the most significant one is that
individuals
 can broaden their horizons. As foreign
cultures
 can be diametrically opposed to
culture
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at
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 our hometowns, our horizons will be broadened and our
mind
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 will be opened. We could learn how to appreciate and embrace different
cultures
instead
 of being stubborn and
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 that our own culture is the best. Another benefit that we should not overlook is that tourists can have a taste of foreign
cultures
 even when they are on a short trip,
such
 as joining workshops to make handicrafts with traditional techniques in foreign countries, participating in special festivals, following customs in foreign countries and trying traditional foreign cuisines.
Although
 these experiences may not help them thoroughly understand
about
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foreign
cultures
, they may trigger our interest in exploring them more comprehensively when we are back
to
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 our home country. Not only does
tourism
 benefit
individuals
, but it
also
 contributes to society.
Tourism
 is without a doubt beneficial to the destination country’s economy as it increases the export of services,
thus
 the gross domestic product. It helps boost business in related industries, ranging from retailing, infrastructure and transportation to accommodation. It will help bring about more employment opportunities, as talents are needed when the country develops new tourist spots. The demand for employees in the service industry,
such
 as hotel management and business marketing will
also
 be boosted. Another advantage is that
tourism
 can help raise funds for preserving cultural heritage.
Tourism
 is a strong financial incentive for the government to financially support the maintenance of archaeological sites as these are the main tourist attractions. It will be less likely for the government to demolish cultural buildings and sites for urban renewal projects as these tourist spots can bring income to the country. The government could make use of the money generated from these industries to preserve its culture, making sure to maintain the landscape in order to keep it attractive for tourists. Under
this
 line of thinking, a thriving
tourism
 industry can lead to a lot of advantages to both
individuals
 and society and it is believed that
this
 trend is going to continue in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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