some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. #people #exercise #health

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Many believe that
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good
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others think that
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diet
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with proper nutrition is
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key method for it. It seems to me that a healthy
diet
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is more necessary than
exercise
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for a healthy body. On the one hand , Doctors suggest that everyone
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do
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everyday
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because it keeps our body fit physically
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mentally. By doing
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, our mind thinks well and
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good ideas .
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, a survey conducted by
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department proves that if a person
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exercise
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daily
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he reduces
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70
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health
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problems like
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cholesterol level, blood pressure, obesity, heart
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etc.
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, by doing physical activities
people
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can feel active for the whole day and do their work
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proper
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manner. 
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, specialists suggest that
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should eat food
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all
nutrients
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the nutrients
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. If
people
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does
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not take
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diet
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they feel tired and can not do any work actively.
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dieticians, if someone
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their meal they might suffer
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many
health
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issues
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headache , fever , laziness etc.
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,
proper
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diet
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plan makes us happy and active and our
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can
also
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take
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important decisions properly.
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,
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exercise
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is good for
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, if
people
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does
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not eat
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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diet
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they might suffer from many
health
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disorders.
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plays 70
percent
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and
exercise
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plays 30
percent
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role in our lives.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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