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The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canada provinces between 2001 and 2006

The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities in different Canada provinces between 2001 and 2006
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The graph provides information about a different proportion of the international
students
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graduated
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who graduated
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 from Canadian universities in eight different provinces in 2001 and 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of international university graduates in 2006 was greater in most of the provinces than in 2001.
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 with, in 2006, foreign
students
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 who graduated from universities in New Brunswick were the highest percentage (almost 12%) compared to other cities in the same year,
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 in the year 2001, there were only 7% graduated in
this
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 city.
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, the second highest percentage of international
students
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 can be seen in the cities of Nova Scotia and British Colombia, which produced almost the same number of international
students
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 by over 10% for both cities. Interestingly, in the same year, Nova Scotia, Quebec, Manitoba, Newfoundland & Labrador, and Ontario produced all the international university
students
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 at above six
percent
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per cent
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.
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, in the province of Alberta, the proportion of international
students
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 in 2006 was much lower at around 4%, compared to almost 6% in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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