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Some people believe that reading books is more worthwhile than exploring the internet. Discuss both views

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Nowadays people have mixed views about whether getting
information
 from
books
 is more comfortable or by searching on the world wide web.
This
 essay will explore both aspects with some reasons and examples. Some
persons
Replace the word
people
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 agree that studying
books
 is more beneficial, because they think, it is really feasible and it has got more pure
information
 than exploring on websites.
Besides
 they assert that learning by book is more effective.
For instance
, based on the new articles, people who read a lot of
books
 are more healthy and do not suffer from depression and panic disorder. In
this
 sense, reading a book can relax readers and act as meditation. On the other sides, young folk, think that the Internet is one of the inseparable technologies in our lives. In
this
 case, utilisation of
this
 global virtual equipment is very helpful. Because there is a wide variety of
information
 which are inexpensive and easy to access. As an advantage of the internet's example, researchers recently deduced that the velocity and performance of learning have increased after the invention of the internet.
According to
this
 perspective, scientists can mind more
information
 and reach a better connection with each other. Eventually, spending time reading
books
 or exploring the World Wide Web has its own benefits and advantages. It depends on the personality and how to use them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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