The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

It is
undeniable
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fact that smoking in society
widely
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spread. And it has
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an essential part of
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our
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live
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. In
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I will look at
causes
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the causes
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and examine
factors
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the factors
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responsible for
this
problem. One of the main causes of smoking is that most majority think that cigarettes or any
tabak
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tobacco
products give pleasure,
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,
however
exactly
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smoking
give
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causes
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only damage
for
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your organism. Many people
knew
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all
this
harm, but they can not stop
the
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smoking. The second cause that might be noted in my view is habit. From my
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experience
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I started smoking in 11 grade, and for me
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smoking was really heavy. First of
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you should have strength of will
,
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if you want
quit
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smoking.
Secondly
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you should read about
damage
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the damage
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of smoking
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because
healthy
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a healthy
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body is vital for your future. Another problem that follows is that more people do not
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understand seriously of
this
danger. The information about damage from smoking you will find in websites, or you can ask
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a doctor
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.
Doctor
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will explain to you
this
. Take
for example
smoking process, you start
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breath
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and
afterwards
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nicotine will spread in your
organisme
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organism
organisms
appraximility
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approximability
in 30
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seconds
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. From
this
next harm
receive
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brain. The vessel will be significantly narrowed at
first,
then
it will expand. I
red
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read
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that smoking will
get
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your life shorter
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on
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15 minutes so it would be not surprising to see some problems of
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organisms
in people who
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smoking
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in the near future.
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we should be ready to bear all the consequences of that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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