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A Grow model is a model which help to acheve a client's goal. Do you agree or disagree?

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Do not be upset if something does not work out - Rome was not built in a day. Gradually introduce different types of food and observe how your body reacts to them. It's
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 for anybody to change a lifestyle and eating habits.
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 a portion of fried bacon with mayonnaise - do it. But, most important, from tomorrow it would be great for you to return to a healthy diet. We are all humans and from time to time may show weakness because in life we face different circumstances and have different moods. So, praise yourself for every small success and focus on the positive, on the fact that you are already on the way to improving your health
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 because you sincerely want it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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