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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The given maps depict the development of a town named Darwin from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
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, most of the upper part remained touched
while
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 the industrial
area
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 was changed to trees was the most noticeable development . In 2009, the majority of the town was an industrial
area
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, which
got
Verb problem
was
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 replaced after 5 years by
the
Correct article usage
apply
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trees. There was
also
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 the addition of a harbour in the sea, connected with a new footpath through the trees
area
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.
Furthermore
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, there used to
have
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be
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 just three residential accommodations, but in 2014, the number was twice more than that 5 years prior.
Along with
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 a new university next to it. The smaller industrial
area
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 was
also
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 replaced by a swimming pool.
On the other hand
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, the school, convention centre, the main road, the lake, the fishing
area
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 and
also
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 the two swimming pools near the sea
on
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in
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 the upper industrial
area
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 were all unchanged after the development

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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