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The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the United States in 2009 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the United States in 2009 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The representation illustrates the amount of electricity produced by renewable and non-renewable
energy
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sources
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 in
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the united
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united states
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United States
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 between 2009 and 2019 The first bar graph clearly explains the amount of
power
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 created by different types of non-renewable
energy
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sources
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. The second block diagram shows the renewable
energy
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sources
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 in detail. In 2009, petroleum was the minimal
power
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source
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 when compared to others,it
contributes
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contributed
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 around 57
billion
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kilowatt
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kilowatts
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- hours and later
during
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in
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 2019 it decreased to 40
billion
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. The highest
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energy producing
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energy-producing
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 element
at
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 2009 was coal, it made around 1756
billion
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 kilowatt-hours. During 2019, natural gas was the leading
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power generating
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power-generating
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source
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by
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making 1582 kilowatt-hours. Nuclear
power
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source
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 was the consistent element over the years. Hydroelectric was the persistent
energy
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 generating factor during 2009-2019
by
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making 273
billion
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 kilowatt-hours. The
least producing
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least-producing
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energy
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sources
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 are geothermal,
plant
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and plant
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/animal matter. Solar
energy
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had
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a
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rapid growth as time goes by. Wind
power
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 was the highest
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energy producing
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energy-producing
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source
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 at 2019
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources, power, source, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Trends
  • Breakdown
  • Significant
  • Wind power
  • Solar power
  • Hydropower
  • Sustainable
  • Biomass
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear energy
  • Percentage
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Shift
  • Kilowatt-hours
  • Sustainability
  • Geothermal
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