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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discussion both sides and give your opinion

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Over the many centuries, the world has been discovered by humans.
Furthermore
, population settlement is the first milestone in the way. By the way, the early modern period has lasted from A.D. 1500 to the present and has resulted in wide-ranging intellectual, political and economic change.
Furthermore
, people have changed the way they learn, think, and communicate by using a variety of technologies to adjust themselves. As time flies, post-generation youths deteriorate their unlimited wants by using selfishness.
Moreover
, overpopulation is one of the causes of environmental problems. The issue was started from a big deal of human beings. The increasing population has led to a shortage of resources. If
this
 continues, it will be very difficult to sustain
such
 a huge population. The other environmental issues including pollution, waste management, deforestation, climate change and global warming are all associated with overpopulation. The solutions of the issues have many paths to solve. Ways
such
 as replacing disposal items with reusable items, reusing paper, recycling waste to conserve natural resources etc. , how we can decrease the environmental issues by ourselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unified response
  • consensus
  • autonomy
  • sovereignty
  • frameworks
  • sustainability
  • multilateral agreements
  • cross-border issues
  • ecosystems
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • biodiversity
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmental policy
  • sustainable development
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