Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however believe that school is the best place to learn this.

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It has been observed that few people think that
kids
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should be taught to become
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in society.
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rest says school could teach them.
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part which is
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should teach children followed by
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might be the better area for
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learning. To commence with
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point the foremost, when is
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are the role models of every
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before adulting age. To elucidate, children imitate
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try to develop behaviour
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what they see so
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must be there about
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and teeth, their
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, the
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,
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and manners
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manners
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and manners
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also
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correct them whenever
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misunderstood
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. To exemplify, a boy
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Rahul lives beside my house. He’s 8 years old but along his age, his decent behaviour outshines among other
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in my area and showcases how
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teaching has been given by his
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.
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,
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are the places where
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spend most of
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time. In layman’s language,
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consist of 6 to 8 hours please with money curriculum activities apart from studies. So teachers should introduce personality development sessions in fun Maina every week including video lessons games,
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2012, that every two out of 5
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students who
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were taught to behave well acquired better designation in future and gained much respect in society. I hope if both
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as well as
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schools
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understand the rules and provide better teaching about personality behaviour, etiquettes
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so that children will know
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the importance
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which will make them keep things faster and
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they will be good people to society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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